An Adventure: The Rebels of Chayloon

[StarPadre]

This is Part 1 of my adventure ‘Rebels of Chayloon’. This part is the mission instructions and information given to the PC operative team by New Republic Forces officers.

The other parts will follow. Only Part 1 should be read by players!

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MISSION BRIEFING

Destination - Chayloon 2 [Sector F24]
Operatives - New Republic Forces Mission Team [ _________ ]

Outline

The objective of this mission is to give support to an independent rebel group. Along with several other secret insurgency activities in neighbouring systems, this will contribute to a critical disturbance in Imperial authority within the sector F24 (Arguvant) of the mid rim region.

We have recently received intelligence reports concerning what appears to be a local rebellion against Imperial forces & Imperial allied corporate interests (believed to be a subsidiary of Minarac Enterprises) on the jungle world Chayloon 2. Decrypted Imperial communications indicate sabotage activity on a growing scale, including sporadic guerrilla warfare.

The identity of the rebels is unknown. They may be a breakaway faction of local corporate personnel, or possibly members of the native population. Local Imperial personnel may know the identity of the rebels.

According to the existing survey records, the native sentients of Chayloon 2 are at a primitive level of technology. If they are responsible, then it is feared that without military advice or possibly direct leadership, their rebellion will be brutally quelled.

The Operative Team

This consists of members possessing varied yet complementary skills and capacities, including military expertise, as well as diplomatic and technical abilities.

Specific Orders

Travel to Chayloon 2.
Identify and locate the budding rebel forces.
Assess the situation.
Assist in their rebellion against Imperial forces.

Resources

Your ship will be the Lynx (a Bryntac class 12 light freighter). This model is thought to be used by several traders dealing with the local Minarac facility and so should not raise suspicions. We are unable to provide up-to-date clearance codes so you will have to bluff it out as best you can. You should be out of scanner reach once you get down into the planetary surface ‘scar valleys’.

The Lynx is a ‘bottom of the line’ junk freighter, not known for comfort. The galley is also the sleeping area - the beds being recessed into the floor when not in use. The same, cramped space is utilized by everyone for everything, except for actually flying the ship.

For stats and deckplan see https://rancorpit.com/forums/viewtopic.php?p=196919#196919

The freighter is pilot-assisted by an Astromech R2 droid (R2 9R), and stocked with 4 infantry support weapons (modified E Web Repeating Blasters), as well as 10 cases of NR standard issue Blaster Carbines (6 per case, with 4 ammo clips each). These are rugged and reliable, even in the hands of amateurs.


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Survey Information on Chayloon 2 (Limited)

Type: Terrestrial
Temperature: Temperate
Atmosphere: Type 1 (Breathable)
Hydrosphere: Moderate (32% surface water)
Gravity: Standard -3%
Terrain: Forest, bush, freshwater, swamp, mountainous (no full map schematic available)
Length of Day: 27.53 standard hours
Length of Year: 459 local days

Sapient Native Species: Mah-ta
Population: 12, 230 off-world personnel & families; Native population unknown
Planet Function: Mineral Extraction
Tech Level: Stellar; (Native – primitive; stone tools)
Major Exports: Gemstones & Belt Minerals
Major Imports: None
Starport: Cohlanga Down Facility


Star system: Galactic Survey data

System name: Chayloon
Star Name: Haphlux

Orbital Bodies

Name.................Type.................Moons
Chayloon 1..........Vacuum...............2
Inner Belt............Asteroid belt
Chayloon 2..........Type 1................none
Outer Belt............Asteroid belt
Chayloon 3..........Gas Giant............4
Chayloon 4..........Gas Giant............7

Planetary Surface Geography

Chayloon 2 is a forest/jungle world, with a population clustered in the equatorial regions due to climactic variations. Huge, volcanic mountain chains rise out of flatland surroundings to form criss crossing belts of rock (known to space goers, having looked down from orbit, as ‘whip scars’). The flatland valley areas consist of lakes, swamps, ‘velth’ and jungles, surrounded by long stretches of mountainous terrain. The massive velth expanses consist of closely-packed, broad leaved, stubby trees of several varieties, all similar in size. These have short (2 3m) trunks and flat splays of leaves forming what looks like a raised ground level, beneath which is the dark and damp ‘under velth’.



Native life

Chayloon 2’s sentient inhabitants are called the Mah-ta, an amphibian-like race believed to have a stone age technology. Their primitive society of herding clans was not always so, however, as archaeological remains have been discovered which point to an ancient civilisation, which although apparently limited to stone age technology, was potentially great in scale and grandeur. There are some very old records of several sub species of Mah ta, having different anatomical forms and social structures, but the information is vague. These were probably just races of Mah ta living in varied climactic conditions perhaps in the swamps or upon the mountain slopes.

Resources

Mineral Asteroids
The Chayloon system is rich in mineral asteroids, to which the corporation MINARAC ENTERPRISES holds the legal mining rights. Local Minarac interests, although not directly managed by the Minarac HQ on Coruscant, apparently maintain a small mining fleet serviced by several planetary surface processing installations.

Crystalline Gemstones
As well as mineral asteroid mining there is one other major business activity the harvesting of crystalline gemstones from the slopes of the great mountain gorges. It is for the export of these gemstones that Chayloon is best known. Their multi coloured, multi faceted nature cannot be artificially copied, except at great cost which makes the process unprofitable. Indeed, in some Arguvant sector and neighbouring sector business deals, when local currency is looking unstable or the political conditions are volatile, Chayloon gems are used in lieu of currency! This practice was declared illegal by the Imperium, but recently local ex-Imperial elements have resorted to such methods of payment


Imperial Presence in the Chayloon System
[Data extracted from captured vessels of High Admiral Yarrit’s Fleet.]

A brief breakdown of the Imperial force’s strength and command structure

Lt. Col. Relthus commands the remaining elements of an Imperial Army Regiment, plus a reduced strength Stormtrooper Battalion (Major Karbin).

The IA regiment has been reduced to less than half strength two depleted battalions commanded by Major Moltor and Major Chad.

The First (Armour) Battalion (Maj. Moltor) consists of one company equipped with repulsorlift armoured combat vehicles (ALCUs (Armoured Light Combat Unit), MRTs (Medium Repulsorlift Tanks) and RaSCaVs (Repulsorlift Scout/Comm Vehicles), one with armoured walkers (AT ATs, AT GTs, AT STs and AT Pts) and one company (Scout) is equipped with Speeder Discs. There is no fourth company. The battalion has several support elements: IGAACs and a Floating Fortress.

The Second Battalion (Maj. Chad) is also depleted in strength, a Line Battalion of Imperial Army Infantry units (with some Light Personnel Skiffs).

Major Karbin commands the Stormtrooper Battalion, at half strength, who guard the Imperial military facility at the planetary surface starport, Cohlanga Down.

Other military presence
Minarac Enterprises local security forces’ strength and composition is unknown.
Details of any mercenary or paramilitary elements are unavailable.

[StarPadre]

Part 2
Potential Players should not read this or the subsequent parts.


Gamesmaster’s Background

Chayloon 2 Geography
(See the information in the PCs’ mission briefing.)

Wandering through the under velth feels like being in a limitless, low roofed hut with never ending struts and pillars.

Native Life
(See the information in the PCs’ mission briefing.)

The Mah ta are the best known of Chayloon 2’s sentient inhabitants, but their winged, mountain dwelling cousins, the Groh-ta, are almost totally unknown to off-worlders, including those inhabiting the planet! The claims to have seen flying Mah-ta have become a common joke, but few people (except for those few who have seen them) believe the claims to be true. The situation is not helped by the fact some people who have not seen them claim to have done so!

Minarac Enterprises
(See the information in the PCs’ mission briefing.)

Minarac employees and contractors work both the system’s asteroid belts but focus mainly on the outer belt. On Chayloon 2’s planetary surface, Minarac personnel mine the precious gemstones mostly from the relatively inaccessible mountain sides, not only because the seams are richer there but also because the mines can be much more easily drained. Down in the flatlands the mines silt up constantly, not just in the jungle or swamp regions, but in the velth too. Another reason is the fact that the Mah ta slave miners are hidden from the sight of their flat land dwelling brothers by the great mountain chain walls, which has helped prevent unrest in the past.

The Mah ta, Groh-ta, and Their Secrets

Minarac personnel have several misconceptions concerning the world's natives. Mah ta do not only dwell in the flat land jungles and velth, but their priestly sects inhabit what remains of several ancient, mountain cities. These Holy Places have sprawling catacombs and caverns, with elaborately carved temples and shrines. Here Mah ta priests mix with their cousins, the winged Groh ta, working and praying side by side. No others are allowed to enter to look upon their secrets - except for the ‘lone warriors’ (described below).

It is only here in these ancient cities, in the presence of the ‘world spirit’, that for centuries the cousins of Chayloon have cooperated. Here the priests understand that the world, through them, has a spiritual life, and that this spirit rules the mountain tops and lava wells, the steaming springs and wide rivers of the flatlands, and even the sky above.

The ancient cities tend to be situated within the slopes of the longest dormant volcanos, which us why Minarac Enterprises has so far remained ignorant of their existence. The corporation prefers to mine more recently active or excitable volcanos for it is there that new-ish cracks and splits best reveal the rich clusters within the gem strata. This might be thought a dangerous practise, but all they lose if an eruption occurs is some mining equipment and some slaves. Their own monitoring personnel can evacuate quickly. The occasional eruption is considered an acceptable financial loss compared to the profits being made.

Recently, however, these choice gem-streams have begun to dry up, and very few worthwhile semi active volcanos remain. Therefore, Minarac has begun moving its operations down the scar sides towards the long inactive volcanos, getting closer and closer to the Cousins’ secret Holy Places.

The True Role of the Holy Places

The prayers and rituals of the Cousins’ priestly sects serve a very particular purpose and have been carried out for many thousands of years. The priests themselves are force sensitive, and in their collected numbers can wield a considerable concentration of force power. This is brought to bear upon approaching meteors, which spring constantly from the great asteroid belts in the Chayloon system, re-directing &/or breaking the largest up into tiny meteorites so that little environmental damage results from their descent. The priests’ constant meditation forewarns them of a large meteorite shower’s approach, which allows them to call upon all the other priests and begin the great incantation and ritual.

The result has had the Imperials and Minarac upon Chayloon 2 foxed for some time. Their studies have shown that large meteor strikes should be much more frequent than they are, what with the planet’s proximity to the asteroid belts. Minarac has performed a preliminary study of the upper atmosphere and although results were inconclusive the investigating team speculatively suggested that there must be some special property possessed by Chayloon 2’s skies which burns up asteroids more effectively than similar planets. They proposed something along the lines of exaggerated temperature gradients and differentials, causing a rapid superheating and disintegration of the mineral rich meteors.

This is also thought to be the cause of the occasional ‘unexplained’ loss of descending or ascending space going vessels - the unusual mesospheric forces must be affecting the ships. Few have noticed that the rare ship losses tend to occur during large meteor shower strikes, and those that have noticed think that is explanation enough - meteor showers being an obvious reason for missing ships. No-one has noticed that the losses have been clustered in certain regions of the sky (which correspond to spots above the holy cities and the largest concentrations of free Mah ta population). The admittedly rare effect has become a minor mystery, told of in spooky tales by free traders and transport pilots who have visited Chayloon 2 or who know ships that have been lost. (Think ‘Bermuda Triangle’!)

Note: At an appropriate moment, when the PCs are either discussing the Chayloon system or travelling through it, the gamesmaster might want to give PCs with Astrogation a Moderate chance, with Planetary Systems’ a Difficult chance or those with higher Knowledge Stats a Very Difficult chance of suddenly realising that a planet sandwiched between two asteroid belts like Chayloon 2 should be subject to a LOT of meteor strikes.

The Mah ta Rebellion

The Mah ta and the Groh ta, who understand very well the cruelty of the (Minarac and Imperial) off worlders, and have become aware of the new danger to their secret, holy places, have now begun to resist and rebel. The slave Mah ta are mostly far too well conditioned - by cruelty, shock and privation - to resist, but the free Mah ta have started to form ‘consecrated’ war-bands (an ancient practice long since neglected) to attack and ambush Minarac bases and mining operations.

Consecration involves a ritual, dance-like fighting match, in which the Mah ta ‘warriors-to-be’ fight against Groh ta ‘guests’ to the first blood. The Groh-ta are lured/invited by horn blowing the previous night and arrive at dawn to fly screeching over the village. The warriors to be run out to fight them with flint knives and an apparently furious melee begins. The warriors to be tend not to harm the Groh ta, but instead defend themselves vigorously until their own blood is drawn. In truth, the opposing Groh ta only draw the blood of those Mah-ta they consider worthy of becoming warriors. After this the bloodied warriors retreat, one by one, to the village, where they are apparently shunned by the other villagers, but this is actually a sign of respect for the newly initiated warriors, who have become a class apart from the normal villagers. As their race is almost extinct, the flying Groh ta limit themselves to performing these initiations, and do not tend to join in the warriors’ subsequent attacks.

When there are enough warriors to form a war band, they move off in search of war - pretty much in a random direction. Soon afterwards, they are invariably met by a veteran, ‘lone warrior’ who teaches them the ways of fighting and instructs them upon how and where best to strike their blow. These lone warriors are sent out from the Holy Places once the Groh ta priests are told by Groh ta warriors that a new war band has been formed in a particular area. Such lone warriors are usually the survivors of several battles, invited by established lone warriors to make the quest for the Holy Places, where they learn their new role. They are the only non-priestly Mah-ta to be found in the Holy Places.


The warbands gather in old disused mines near the target mines, not only to prepare themselves ritually and receive crucial military instruction from the lone warrior, but also to learn the typical layout of the mines. Once ready, they move along the scar side slopes and launch their attack on a working mine. Their missions are usually suicide missions, due to the lack of support from the docile, enslaved Mah ta and their lack of effective military equipment. Their usual tactics are to send some warriors to infiltrate the slave parties, who then wait for a diversionary attack by other warriors. Once that has begun, the infiltrators overpower the Minarac guards and operators, utilising their mining tools and side arms to wreak destruction on vehicles, personnel and equipment until no fighting Mah ta are left alive. Explosions sometimes collapse the tunnels and entrances and the mines are usually abandoned after the more successful attacks.


This picture is heavily inspired by an old 1980’s book illustrating aliens from various sci fi stories. It got cut up for roleplaying purposes (!) but I needed a primitive carrying a blaster, so I drew my own version! I cannot name the book because it was effectively destroyed when I chopped pictures for Traveller and Star Wars adventures out of it! (These were the days before the internet.)

The Off-worlders response to the new threat

The Imperials and Minarac are stepping up their operations against the Mah ta, performing coordinated, sweeping searches of the velth and jungles to locate Mah-ta settlements. Slaving has been reduced in scope as extermination has become the preferred policy. Minarac personnel have become unwilling to trust any new Mah-ta slaves, and so off-world personnel are being recruited to replace the Mah-ta workers, despite the much greater cost. To house the new influx of workers, Minarac Enterprises has begun clearing its Main Operation base's inoperative factory domes of much machinery.

Meanwhile, to actively counter the sabotage activity, Imperial soldiers & Minarac operatives are …

1. Destroying more and more villages
2. Laying traps in old mines
3. Placing secret sensors in the whip-scar valleys so that their forces can preemptively attack gathering war bands.

Recently, Imperial stormtroopers have begun playing a greater role and massacres abound.

Minarac Enterprises has also begun bringing in mercenaries and irregular troops to bolster their own forces – thuggish, dogs of war who relish the idea of easy killing.

[Raven Redstar]

Very cool! Thanks for sharing!
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[StarPadre]

Thanks for saying, Mr Redstar. Now I am moving on to the actual game-play guide ...

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Part 3

Adventure Outline

Preliminary cut away description...
Grey, hairless, humanoid aliens of an amphibian appearance are working in a cave illuminated by a handful self-powered light rods. Men in work-force uniforms (some civilian organisation) operate machinery which cuts into the rock, after which the grey aliens crawl into the tapering crevices created to place small devices and also to scrabble for loose rocks and stones.

Suddenly there is a tremor and a siren starts to wail, its sound coming from outside. Both the men and aliens flee the cavern, joined by others from other caves as they run. Outside a repulsor lift enclosed mining skiff with a large grappling arm awaits and the men rush aboard. It is this vehicle which emits the siren sound. The aliens run every which way, those straying near the vehicle being shot down by blaster-pistol armed men crouching in the access hatch. Once all the men are aboard the vehicle soars into the air and away. Lava streams begin to pour down the mountain side, along with great boulders shaken loose by the growing tremors, and the aliens, in twos and threes, begin dying. None of the grey aliens make it off the mountain side.

Briefing

See Mission Briefing (Part 1) GM’s Note: I gave my players the mission briefing days before the gaming session so that they could familiarise themselves with it. I then began the session with the preliminary cut way above.

Arrival

Ask the players where they want the ship to exit hyperspace into the system and describe accordingly. GM's Note: Standard safety protocol would be to arrive outside one of the belts, rather than try to arrive in between belt and planet.

Asteroid belt nearest PCs’ arrival
A wide and flattish expanse of mostly dark, charcoal coloured galactic debris, not easy to pick out visually (only 4% albedo [i.e. reflectivity]). EMS sensor arrays can ID them well enough, so that the cabin sensor screens will be crowded with what looks like way more asteroids than can be seen out of the view port. The belt is a flattened (though still thick) ring shape, one could fly over/under it.

Other asteroid belt
A dissipated belt of mostly ice asteroids, some very large. Lots of little fragments cause an apparent ‘mistiness’ within the belt.

Local comm traffic
The ‘Metosp’ (Message to Spacers) channel is dead. This is no surprise in such a back-water. There is, however, something being transmitted system wide - an automated Asteroid Warning beacon is active, indicating ‘Rogue asteroids’.

Escort!
As the PCs approach close planetary orbit, somehow, perhaps from the ‘other’ side of the asteroid belt, they pick up a tail - a Minarac Enterprises operation defence fighter.

GM’s Note: As I was using models, I put the model of the PC’s ship on the table, then held the fighter model to show relative position a good distance away from the table, which meant the players had to squint a bit to make out what the pursuing ship looked like. If there was to be combat, I would have a player hold the PC’s ship while I held the Minarac fighter to show relative positions and reveal manoeuvres etc.

The pilot questions them using the standard Metosp frequency...

[StarPadre]

Part 4

The Initiation

After fighting the Imperials, the PCs will probably return to the friendly village, either to re-establish contact with Ta-Ytref &/or to escort the escaped Mah-Ta. Once the PCs are back, the elder Ta-Ytref will invite PCs to stay (again), this time promising that there will be warriors tomorrow.

That evening, horns are blown and a feast is had (a long-necked grazing beast is slain and roasted) but there is still no sign of warriors. As this is a waiting game, and the Mah-Ta do not really have much information to offer, or relevant conversation, then you could skip to the morning, unless your PC party have issues or other things to talk about.

First thing next morning, in the rich-red sky of dawn, the Groh-Ta warriors arrive, four of them. At first, they cry out and swoop over the village, this being the start of the war dance performance.

See the section The Mah-Ta Rebellion in Part 2 (Gamesmaster’s Background) for information regarding the warrior-initiation ritual .

Play Guide

This is a chance for the GM to use vivid descriptions - the fear and screams, the frantic activity and blood!

Starting with the shrill cries of the approaching Groh-Ta, then the flapping of their wings, this is followed by the screams of the terrified Mah-Ta younglings as most of tribe rush around looking for somewhere to hide. Then a handful of young males, armed with flint knives, run out acting much more ‘aggressively’ towards the attackers.


(Note: Don’t feel obliged to show players this somewhat corny picture of the 15mm figures I used in the adventure. The huts shown were for a different hobby project and so don’t match the shape of those on the village map. I made this picture just for fun and to break up the text!)

PCs with Alien Species OR Cultures skills who pass Difficult Knowledge rolls will realise what is happening. Alternatively, if the Gamesmaters prefers, Ta-Ytref will attempt to stop the PCs, and to explain what is happening. But if the players do not understand to what is really happening, perhaps believing the Groh-Ta are enemies attacking the village with bad intent, then their PCs could cause some trouble!

If any PCs do attack the Groh-Ta then the young Mah-Ta initiates will become confused. If at any point a PC wounds a Mah-Ta (or worse), everything will stop very suddenly. The Groh-Ta will land, and both Mah-Ta and Groh-Ta will stare at the offending PC, dumbfounded and disappointed. The offending PC will then be given a flint knife and urged to fight a Mah-Ta until they prove to the Groh-Ta’s satisfaction that they are truly warriors (having been bloodied or drawn blood) and not just a fool. If any other PCs join in this fight, then they too will have to do the same.

Note: Force sensitive characters may sense the workings of the force during these initiatory combats - it is there to reduce the chance of fatal injury. This effect is brought about by the cooperation of Mah-Ta and Groh-Ta, just like it is by the cooperation of the priests in the Holy Places. PCs cannot tell if it is a dark or light disturbance, as it is alien and strange to them, but if they sense it then it recognisable as the force at work.

Groh-Ta Warrior
DEXTERITY: 3D+2
Melee Parry 4D+1
Thrown Spear 4D+2
Jungle Survival 3D
KNOWLEDGE: 1D+1
MECHANICAL: 1D
PERCEPTION: 1D+1
STRENGTH: 4D+1
Brawling 5D
Stamina 4D+2
TECHNICAL: 1D
Move: 10 (ground) 15 (flight)

Mah-Ta Warriors-to-be
DEXTERITY: 2D+2
Melee Parry 3D
Melee Combat 3D
KNOWLEDGE: 1D+1
MECHANICAL: 1D
PERCEPTION: 1D+1
STRENGTH: 4D
Brawling 4D
TECHNICAL: 1D
Move: 13

Commonly used Mah-Ta & Groh-Ta Weapons...

Knife - Damage: STR+1D(max.6D) // Difficulty: 5 [Very Easy]
Spear - Damage: STR+1D+1 (max.6D+1) // Difficulty: 7 [Easy]
Hatchet - Damage: STR+2 // Difficulty: 8 [Easy]

A New War-Band

The war band created by the melee-ritual includes Ta-Ytref’s son, Ta-Ytrab (who speaks some very basic Basic) and 8 other Mah-Ta. Some of these can be refugees from the other village if you wish, although the PCs might need to pass Moderate perception rolls to notice and recognise which is which.

The new warriors are given food (in the form of large nuts and some kind of pulpy loaves, wrapped in the cut strips of young velth leaves) and they arm themselves with flint knives. They are keen to move off immediately to their destiny.

If the PCs don’t join them, then Ta-Ytref will suggest they do

[StarPadre]

Part 5

The attack on the Minarac barb-mine is not meant to be a great challenge for the PCs – and if the Minarac personnel concentrate mainly on escaping alive, it should not be! If it does prove a difficult fight, then I suggest the GM skips over the following episode, to allow the PCs to recover before getting caught up in more action. That said, played cleverly, this next episode doesn’t have to be all about combat, can be a lot of fun and is a chance for the PCs to show some courage.

If the GM wants to include the next episode, then just as the attack on the mine ends - at the very moment when the PCs might be thinking, “That was easy!” - things get heavy.

Imperial Patrol (Optional Episode)

A nearby Imperial Stormtrooper patrol has been diverted to the site of the mine attack, ordered to sweep the valley for any surviving rebels, kill most of them and capture one or two, if possible, for interrogation. The lone warrior, Ta-Kiazee, who moved off to a distance before the attack on the mine began, spots this patrol first, while the PCs are still busy at the mine. The Imperials’ presence will greatly worry him, as he thinks they might discover the ancient city (one of the ‘Holy Places’) further up the valley!

The Imperial patrol consists of speeder discs, stormtrooper infantry squads & an AT-AT walker. The walker strides down the valley, its feet crashing through vegetation and splashing water from the shallow, rocky riverbed.

For information on the Speeder disc, see: https://rancorpit.com/forums/viewtopic.php?p=197098#197098


Play Guide

As there is a danger of the Imperial AT-AT patrol discovering the Holy Place, Ta-Kiazee will return to ask them PCs to lead the enemy away.

[StarPadre]

Part 6:
The Grand Finale - Attack on the Imperial Military Facility

If you included the optional episode to rescue the captured priests, then there are now enough priests at the Holy Place to draw and direct a meteor storm onto Cohlanga. If you did not use that optional episode, then there were always enough priests to do so!

The priests have already explained the situation regarding their failed attempt to destroy Cohlanga. The PCs might already have decided that they ought to attempt to de-activate the defence shield, but whether they have already decided or not, the priests can make a very clear request for aid (perhaps through Ta-Kiazee)...

[Raven Redstar]

I just want to say how impressive and thorough all of your notes are. These are great!
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[The Bissler]

[StarPadre]

Is the actual adventure any good though? Is it playable? Would it work in another GM's hands? Would your players like it? Is it a certain kind of adventure? Is the 'disable the shield generator' goal too derivative, or is there enough original stuff in the rest of it to make it its own story?

Which component parts do you like? Is the story interesting? The background? Is it cohesive?

Does the adventure feel like the Star Wars' universe?

I find the way it comes out on my pc screen on this forum very hard to read, for example. Should I format adventures on my own website, then post links here?

I'd love to know if converting the old adventures's files, with all the scanning and editing and correcting is really worth all the effort.

[Xain Arke]

Finally read through the adventure and I have to agree with Raven Redstar and The Bissler that it's a pretty great piece of work with
interesting setting, detailed notes and welll done maps.

I especially like the pic of the Ma-Ta 'Lone Warrior' he's got an endearing mix of the muppets and Return of the Jedi commando going on

On the actual adventure itself, it is definietly playable and I think would make a good first adventure for a group of players, or as a starting
mission for more experienced players shifting from one game arc to another. It also reads like it could be easily expanded out for a campaign
in the surrounding region, using the planet as a foothold to operate off of.

The information is certainly clear enough for another GM to make use of it in their own games. I'd definitely use it for my group if I was
starting a new game. Also, just as an aside, you could easily shift it to other era's, for example, in a clone wars game you could swap the
Rebel/NR team for a Republic one and have Separatists instead of Imperial forces, play it a bit like the Onderon Arc of the Clone Wars
Cartoon. I guess you could do Resistance/First Order too (if you must )

Things I really like (not including the Lone Warrior), the details of the environment, the tree 'layer' you describe is not something I have
specifically come across before and the adventure part with just the walker legs visible below the canopy is a vivid image in my mind even
as I write this. I also find the way the Force is used by the aliens is extremely interesting to me and the description as being unknown if it
is Light or Dark and 'alien' to the players has that Star Wars fantasy/Sci-fi mix wonder to it. The way the alien culture works, with warriors
having to be ritually created is a great cultural weirdness that I enjoyed reading about.

I can't speak for anyone else, but I found the story and background very interesting, it got my GM brain thinking of visuals and where else
the adventure could go after each encounter. It was certainly also cohesive, I didn't find myself getting lost or wondering where it was going.
The little notes about the possible out comes etc. would be helpful for new or green GM's especially.

the adventure read Star Wars in my minds eye, if you get what I mean.

I didn't really have too much of a problem reading it here in the format it has, but by all means put website links up if you have a specific
idea of how it should look on the screen

I can't say if the work you put into this was worth it to you, I know what it's like to put non digital stuff into digital data, but your work was
definitely worth it to me StarPadre, so thanks for putting it up

(I'm still thinking about this world and it's alien culture)

[StarPadre]

Thanks Xain Arke. I'm happy now that I made the effort.

I too like the environment - like the way I could lay out a large piece of paper covered in semi-regularly spaced circles for combat in the 'under-velth'. Each circle was a trunk, and folk could try to move from cover behind one to another, in an increasingly smoky environment, while blaster shots kept sending shards of bark out every time they hit a trunk (which was often).

At some point, when I have the time and the energy, I will put up another such old adventure. Maybe my favourite about a pirate admiral called Bac-Lor-Khan.

[The Bissler]

Hi Star Padre,

I'd be delighted to give you fuller feedback and answer your questions!

[StarPadre]

Thank you The Bissler. Great feedback, and very encouraging. It is very hard, if not impossible, to judge one's own stuff, or to know if other GM's find it useful unless they say.

I am far more convinced I should work up another adventure at some point.

The star wars adventure is not on my website (www.bigsmallworlds.com), sorry. That website is almost exclusively about my current Warhammer Old World Tilea campaign. I was more asking whether it would have been better if I had put the Chayloon scenario there, to format more clearly, and then link.

Maybe I should do that next time?

[The Bissler]