The High Republic: A Test of Courage v1.3

[shootingwomprats]

Book previously released that could use some editorial looksy.




The High Republic: A Test of Courage v1.3 (2021-May-29)

[Forceally]

Did you post the right work? Or establish the right link? I downloaded it, and I got The High Republic - Light of the Jedi Vehicles & Ships v0.1. I'll make any comments about the ships and vehicles, but maybe you should change the title of this thread and attempt to post the Test of Courage one in a different thread.

[shootingwomprats]

[Forceally]

You may have attached the wrong file, but I think it's still a good idea to make the erroneous file available for review on these threads.

One thing - on all of your works, you have Miscellanea instead of Miscellaneous. Is that an error on your part, or is that a plural form of Miscellaneous. If it's the latter, I've never heard of it before.

[Whill]

[Forceally]

Looking at this right now.

Table of contents
Avon Starro;s Scoot Speeder - should be Avon Starros' Scoot Speeder. Same mistake later in the work.

Imri Cantaros
It should be scholar: Jedi lore.

You seem to be shifting between lightsaber repair and lightsaber repair/engineering. Also, there are times you have sense force when it should be sense Force.

Douglas Sunvale
It should be scholar: Jedi lore. You have melee combat 6D+2 listed twice.
You have administration and teaching. For the first, the closest skill there is to it is business administration. As for teaching, maybe scholar: teaching?

Handsies
Don't you mean caustic rain and water instead of caustic rain and possibly water?

You have Force Statis when it should be Force Stasis. You have: "Roll Force user's control skill vs difficulty number and target's Strength". Shouldn't it be alter skill. You might also consider rewording the following: "the alter roll replaces the ranged target number the shooter who must roll equal or higher in order to hit." You mean the Jedi must make an alter roll against the shooter's blaster roll. If successful, the blaster shot will be caught in stasis. Right?

Is it okay I add the two powers you listed here into my Force Compendium work. I'll make certain you receive the appropriate credit for creating it.


The stats for the Pantorans - did you convert that from the Endless Vigil book from EEG or a different source?

[shootingwomprats]

[Forceally]

Two things:

If you didn't make a conversion of the Pantorans, then the stats you made are original/home-brewed?

You put area of effect in the description. By putting the phrase "line of sight" in the Control difficulty, you're putting a limit to the range of the range of effect for the power. No issue with that. But why did you put in the area of effect (radius)? You're making it seem like the following may be possible - the Jedi has thirteen blaster bolts coming in from all around him, but he only sees three coming from in front of him. The others are to the sides, behind, or even above him, but he doesn't see him. He activates the power and they all freeze in midair. He calmly walks out of the target area, deactivates the power, and all the shots hit where he once was. In the old KOTOR computer game, you had the Force power tree stun - stasis - stasis field. The scenario I just described, based on you adding area of effect (radius), sounds like stasis field from the computer game. If you want to add a difficulty modifier to Control to account for the limited range of the power, do something like this:

Control Difficulty: Moderate + modifier depending on distance; limited to line of sight

Modifier table
Distance Modifier
0-2 meters +5
3-4 meters +10
5-6 meters +15
7+10 meters +20

Attempts beyond 10 meters automatically fail